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The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes

The diagrams illustrate the phases and apparatus to make cement and how cement is utilised in the production of concrete for construction. The production of cement involves a 5 stage, linear process that begins with the mixing of raw materials and culminates in the packaging of new cement. Making concrete is a simpler process that involves mixing four ingredients in a concrete mixer. Limestone and clay are crushed and the resulting powder is then mixed before being passed through a rotating heater. Once heated this mixture travels over a conveyor belt and is ground through a grinder. Now that the cement has been produced, it is packaged and transported to a building site where it can be used to make concrete. Concrete is made up of half gravel, quarter sand, 10% water and 15% cement. All of these are added together in a cylindrical drum and rotated until concrete is yielded.
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in the production of concrete for construction.

The production of
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involves a 5 stage, linear process that
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begins
with the mixing of raw materials and culminates in the packaging of new
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cement
. Making concrete is a simpler process that involves mixing four ingredients in a concrete mixer.

Limestone and clay
are crushed
and the resulting powder is then mixed
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before
being passed
through a rotating heater. Once heated this mixture travels over a conveyor belt and
is ground
through a grinder.
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Now
that the
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cement
has
been produced
, it
is packaged
and transported to a building site where it can be
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used
to
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concrete.

Concrete
is made
up of half gravel, quarter sand, 10% water and 15%
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cement
. All of these are
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together in a cylindrical drum and rotated until concrete
is yielded
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IELTS academic The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes

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