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The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes, summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes, KwVwR

The diagrams illustrate that different stages and parts produced cement, which is used to manufactured concrete material for building perspective. Overall, the process consists of twelve stages for making cement and concrete, beginning with the raw materials and ending up with concrete for use in building purposes. First of all, limestones and clay are collected to serve as a raw material for making cement. After that, Raw materials were crushed through a crusher and turns into powder forms. Next stage, that powder was going to the mixer and continue to mixer is heated into the rotating heater where the powder is heated from outside. After that, the heated powder was spread on the grinder. Finally, the grinder machine grinding the last form of powder called cement. Where packed in bags. Analysis of concrete production process consists of three stages for making concrete. Cement, sand, gravel, and water are collected to serve as raw materials for making concrete. Where gravel and sand used for 50% and 25% respectively. Whereas cement and water used for 15% and 10%. Finally, all raw materials were mixed into a concrete mixer. Then they get mixed very well. As a result, concrete was ready for use in the buildings purposes

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materials
 and ending up with concrete for This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 in building purposes.

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stages
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Cement
, sand, gravel, and water are collected
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raw
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materials
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used
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. Whereas You use this word too often, consider replacing it withadhesiveplastermudsand
cement
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materials
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