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The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. 6Myj
The diagram illustrates the life cycle of large fish. which is known as salmon. Overall, it can be seen that in the process there three main stages the cycle start from when salmon are small and end into the last stage when adult salmon gave eggs. In the first stage, the baby salmon is known as 'fry'. which is 3 to 8 centimetres long. She lives in the lower river and the speed of floating water is so fast. Fry fish live there for approximately 4 years. When they start growing they move towards the open sea and with time their size also gets an increase to 12 to 15 centimetres. Also, in the second stage, they know smolt and they stay in the open sea for near 5 years. Then after in the third stage, they become adult fish that wise called adult salmon. After becoming an adult it starts to increase in size between 70 to 76 centimetres. To conclude, the final stage was when salmon fish give eggs. It was located in the upper river. The water flow is moving slow. The place where salmon give eggs is under the reeds and it is surrounded by small stones. This end process takes almost 5to 6 months to get complete
The diagram illustrates the life cycle of large fish.
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as salmon.
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that in the process there three main
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stages
the cycle
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from when salmon are
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small
and
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into the last
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when adult salmon gave eggs.

In the
first
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, the baby salmon
is known
as 'fry'.
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which
is 3 to 8
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long. She
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lives
in the lower river and the speed of floating water is
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. Fry fish
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there for approximately 4 years. When they
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growing they
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move
towards the open sea and with time their size
also
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an increase to 12 to 15
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centimetres
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Also
, in the second
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, they know
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smolt and
they stay in the open sea for near 5 years. Then after in the third
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stage
, they become adult fish that wise called adult salmon.
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becoming an adult it
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to increase in size
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between 70 to 76
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centimetres
.

To conclude
, the final
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stage
was when salmon fish give eggs. It
was located
in the upper river. The water flow is moving slow. The place where salmon give eggs is under the reeds and it
is surrounded
by
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small
stones. This
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end
process takes almost 5to 6 months to
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get
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IELTS academic The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.

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3 paragraphs
211 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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