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The diagrams below show the development of the horse

The diagrams below show the development of the horse 3bPbw
The pictures illustrate the evolution of the horse. Overall, the whole procedure consists of 4 stages, starting with Eohippus and finishing with the development of the modern horse. 40 million years ago, the first horse, Eohippus, was comparatively small with a short tail. Its defining characteristic. However, the feature was shown clearly about the structure of its foot, which had 4 digits. Particularly, each of the digits was relatively small. 10 million years later, it had evolved into the larger Mesohippus, with a longer tail and a foot structure of 3 digits. Then, in the next stage of development, Merychippus evolved 15 million years ago. It was a similar size to Mesohippus, and also had 3 digits on its feet, but now the digits on the feet were larger, divided into segments, and the middle digit was very prominent. Finally, the modern horse evolved. It is bigger than its predecessors, with a large mane and its foot structure is a single, extremely large digit.
The pictures illustrate the evolution of the horse.

Overall
, the whole procedure consists of 4 stages, starting with
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Eohippus
and finishing with the development of the modern horse.

40 million years ago, the
first
horse,
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Eohippus
, was
comparatively
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small
with a short tail. Its defining characteristic.
However
, the feature
was shown
clearly
about the structure of its foot, which had 4 digits.
Particularly
, each of the digits was
relatively
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small
. 10 million years later, it had evolved into the larger
Possible spelling mistake found.
Mesohippus
, with a longer tail and a foot structure of 3 digits.

Then, in the
next
stage of development,
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Merychippus
evolved 15 million years ago. It was a similar size to
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Mesohippus
, and
also
had 3 digits on its feet,
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but
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now
the digits on the feet were larger, divided into segments, and the middle digit was
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very
prominent.

Finally
, the modern horse evolved. It is bigger than its predecessors, with a large mane and its foot structure is a single,
extremely
large digit.

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