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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. 7nJA
The maps illustrate how Queen Mary Hospital has developed during three different periods (1960, 1980, 2000). From the overall perspective, it can be clearly observed that the place experienced significant changes regarding the expanding of hospital by demolishing shopping centre and farmland. By the end of the period, there have been four buildings, with pharmacy and hospital being combined, and cancer centre being the largest one. In 1960, the area of hospital was located among three different facilities, namely shops, farmland, and car park, taking place in the south-east of the main road. The building comprised the similar size of the area as almost others, with farmland having been a bit larger. By 1980, shopping centre and farmland have been knocked-down and converted into cancer centre and nursing school respectively. Meanwhile, pharmacy appeared to be joined with the Queen Mary hospital, substantially reducing the size of the cancer centre. In 2000, having replaced the area of nursing school, the centre which was preventing cancer witnessed a huge contribution to its size, being subsequently the biggest building. Following this, the parking was divided into two equally small areas, which were then shared by both the nursing college and car park.
The maps illustrate how Queen Mary
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Hospital
has developed during three
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different
periods (1960, 1980, 2000).

From the
overall
perspective, it can be
clearly
observed that the place experienced significant
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changes
regarding the expanding of
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hospital
by demolishing shopping
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centre
and
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farmland
. By the
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end
of the period, there have been four buildings, with pharmacy and
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hospital
being combined
, and
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cancer
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centre
being the largest one.

In 1960, the
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area
of
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hospital
was located
among three
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different
facilities,
namely
shops,
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farmland
, and car park, taking place in the south-east of the main road. The building comprised the similar size of the
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area
as almost others, with
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farmland
having been a bit larger.

By 1980, shopping
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centre
and
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farmland
have
been knocked
-down and converted into
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cancer
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centre
and nursing school
respectively
. Meanwhile, pharmacy appeared to be
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joined
with the Queen Mary
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hospital
,
substantially
reducing the size of the
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cancer
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centre
.

In 2000, having replaced the
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area
of nursing school, the
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centre
which was preventing
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cancer
witnessed a huge contribution to its size, being
subsequently
the biggest building. Following this, the parking
was divided
into two
equally
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small
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areas
, which were then shared by both the nursing college and car park.
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IELTS academic The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

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