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The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Wa9b
The diagram describes a fish pie and how to make frozen fish pies. The process takes several steps to begin with delivering the main ingredients by trucks, following the manufacture of frozen fish pie and ending up to store and dispatch. According to the diagrams, the main ingredients are fresh salmon, peas, sauce and potatoes. The transportation of potatoes is completed in a month then potatoes are prepared for the process. The first step of potatoes is cleaning, then the potatoes are peeled and cut into slices. After that, they are boiled and before using, they are needed to become a little bit cold in order to store in a package. Meanwhile, on the other side of the process, fresh salmons are marinated with lemon juice and salt at most 12 hours before they have gone cooking in a steam oven. Then, some employees remove their skins and bones. Subsequently, the salmons are visually inspected by a staff member before the following process which is gathering all prepared ingredients. Prepared peas and sauce are combined with the steamed salmon in a microwaveable container, also it is added with stored potatoes. In addition to that a fish pie container is wrapped and frozen. At this point, they are ready for dispatch or they are maybe stored at the factory before shipping.
The diagram
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describes
a fish pie and how to
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make
frozen fish pies. The
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process
takes several steps to
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begin
with delivering the main ingredients by trucks, following the manufacture of frozen fish pie and ending up to store and dispatch.

According to the diagrams, the main ingredients are fresh salmon, peas, sauce and
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potatoes
. The transportation of
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potatoes
is completed
in a month then
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potatoes
are prepared
for the
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process
. The
first
step of
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potatoes
is cleaning, then the
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potatoes
are peeled
and
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cut
into slices. After that, they
are boiled
and
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before
using, they
are needed
to become a
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little bit
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cold
in order to store in a package.

Meanwhile, on the other side of the
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process
, fresh salmons
are marinated
with lemon juice and salt at most 12 hours
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before
they have gone cooking in a steam oven. Then,
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some
employees remove their skins and bones.
Subsequently
, the salmons are
visually
inspected by a staff member
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before
the following
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process
which is gathering all prepared ingredients. Prepared peas and sauce
are combined
with the steamed salmon in a microwaveable container,
also
it is
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added
with stored
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potatoes
.
In addition
to that a fish pie container
is wrapped
and frozen. At this point, they are ready for
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dispatch or
they are maybe stored at the factory
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before
shipping.
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IELTS academic The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
220 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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