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The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. RmKG
The picture illustrates fish pie production between the processing of potatoes and salmon. Overall, there are profound main raw materials to produce fish pie, while those have the same production’ location. Also, various processes will be put together in the store. Initially, potatoes delivery to the factory gains up to one month, and those are cleaned under a flowing stream of water, while the arrival of fresh salmon is immediately marinated to get rid of the fishy smell. After marinating, those are steam on the oven around 12 hours, whereas peeling and slicing of potatoes are done before those are boiled and chilled. However, there are various steps before salmon seasoning with peas and sauce, such as workers must separate the skin and bones, and they have to inspect the quality of those. Moreover, those are mixed with the production of potatoes and being wrapped. Afterward, if these are dispatched to the storage, these will have to be refrigerated first.
The picture illustrates fish pie production between the processing of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
potatoes
and salmon.

Overall
, there are profound main raw materials to produce fish pie, while those have the same production’ location.
Also
, various processes will
be put
together in the store.

Initially
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
potatoes
delivery to the factory gains up to one month, and those
are cleaned
under a flowing stream of water, while the arrival of fresh salmon is immediately marinated to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
rid of the fishy smell. After marinating, those are steam on the oven around 12 hours, whereas peeling and slicing of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
potatoes
are done
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
those
are boiled
and chilled.

However
, there are various steps
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
salmon seasoning with peas and sauce, such as workers
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
separate the skin and bones, and they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
inspect the quality of those.
Moreover
, those
are mixed
with the production of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
potatoes
and
being wrapped
. Afterward, if these
are dispatched
to the storage, these will
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
be refrigerated
first
.

IELTS academic The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies.

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160 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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