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The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. 107W
The image reveals the methods about fish pie production line, while it starts from potato that is delivered by truck and finally mixed with salmon packaged to the store. The snacks production begins from delivery trucks to carry the potatoes. Intially, the potatoes are cleaned up, and then those potatoes enter the stripping process. Subsquently, the clean potatoes are cut into pieces and be placed in the kitchen area. Finally, those pieces are boiled and packaged after the chilling process. After potato processes, salmon that have been delivered by the truck, be flavored with lemon juice and salt plus be steamed in the oven. Moreover, the steamed salmons are sorted to separate between those skins and bones before get inspected. Furthermore, those processed salmon are mixed with prepared peace and sauce, then be wrapped with previous potatos in preparation for freeze and ready to store. Overall, the fish pie is produced within several steps before it is mixed with salmon in the final, the potato is made in various ways by functionaries.
The image reveals the methods about fish pie production line, while it
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starts
from
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potato
that
is delivered
by truck and
finally
mixed with salmon packaged to the store.

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snacks
production
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begins
from delivery trucks to carry the
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potatoes
.
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Intially
, the
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potatoes
are cleaned
up, and then those
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potatoes
enter the stripping process.
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Subsquently
, the clean
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potatoes
are
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cut
into pieces and
be placed
in the kitchen area.
Finally
, those pieces
are boiled
and packaged after the chilling process.

After
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potato
processes, salmon that have
been delivered
by the truck,
be flavored
with lemon juice and salt plus
be steamed
in the oven.
Moreover
, the steamed salmons
are sorted
to separate between those skins and bones
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before
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get
inspected.
Furthermore
, those processed salmon
are mixed
with prepared peace and sauce, then
be wrapped
with previous
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potatos
in preparation for freeze and ready to store.

Overall
, the fish pie
is produced
within several steps
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before
it
is mixed
with salmon in the final, the
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potato
is made
in various ways by functionaries.

IELTS academic The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
172 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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