Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. 5PJp
The table given represents the data about the temperature and hours of daylight in a two different cities i. e. London and Sydney during the same period in Decemeber 2018. The unit of measurement is per degree celsuis and hours. Overall, sydney's weather was much hotter as compare to the london weather over the course of weekend. The hottest day recorded in london was not even coming close to the hottest day in sydney. Even though, minimum temperature recorded in sydney is far more hotter than london's hottest day. To begin with, lets look into the stats mentioned in the temperature and daylight hours table of London, First of all, the warmest day noted over weekend was saturday 29th that had maximum temperature of 13 degree celsuis. Adding on, the coolest day was friday 28th with just 9 degree celsuis temperature during day. In london, the average sunrise time during weekend was 08: 05 AM and average sunset time was 05: 58 PM. Furthermore, lets analyis sudney's temperature and daylight table. Primarily, sunday 30th was the warmest day during weekend as 31 degree celsuis tempratrue was recorded on the day. To continue, coolest day was friday 28th that record 17 degree celsuis temprature. Now, looking into the average sunrise timing during weekend was 05: 45 AM whereas average sunset timing was 08: 07 PM.
The table
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
represents the data about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
temperature
and hours of daylight in a two
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
cities
There should be no space here: "i.e.".
i. e.
London and Sydney during the same period in
Possible spelling mistake found.
Decemeber
2018. The unit of measurement is per
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
degree
Possible spelling mistake found.
celsuis
and hours.

Overall
,
Possible spelling mistake found.
sydney
's weather was much hotter
Comparison requires "than", not 'then' nor 'as'.
as
compare to the
Possible spelling mistake found.
london
weather over the course of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
weekend
. The hottest day recorded in
Possible spelling mistake found.
london
was not even coming close to the hottest day in
Possible spelling mistake found.
sydney
.
Even though
, minimum
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
temperature
recorded in
Possible spelling mistake found.
sydney
is far
Use only "hotter" (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
more hotter
than
Possible spelling mistake found.
london
's hottest day.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lets
look into the stats mentioned in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
temperature
and daylight hours table of London,
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, the warmest day noted over
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
weekend
was
Possible spelling mistake found.
saturday
29th that had maximum
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
temperature
of 13
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
degree
Possible spelling mistake found.
celsuis
. Adding on, the coolest day was
Possible spelling mistake found.
friday
28th with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
9
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
degree
Possible spelling mistake found.
celsuis
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
temperature
during day. In
Possible spelling mistake found.
london
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
average
sunrise time during
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
weekend
was 08: 05 AM and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
average
sunset time was 05: 58 PM.

Furthermore
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lets
Possible spelling mistake found.
analyis
Possible spelling mistake found.
sudney
's
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
temperature
and daylight table.
Primarily
,
Possible spelling mistake found.
sunday
30th was the warmest day during
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
weekend
as 31
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
degree
Possible spelling mistake found.
celsuis
Possible spelling mistake found.
tempratrue
was recorded
on the day. To continue,
A determiner is probably missing here: "the coolest".
coolest
day was
Possible spelling mistake found.
friday
28th that record 17
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
degree
Possible spelling mistake found.
celsuis
Possible spelling mistake found.
temprature
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
, looking into the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
average
sunrise timing during
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
weekend
was 05: 45 AM whereas
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
average
sunset timing was 08: 07 PM.

IELTS academic The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
224 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.