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The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. 85g2m
The diagram provide information about commercial production of frozen fish pies. Overall, it is clear from the diagram and we can see the preparation of process is separate, and the main ingredients here are fresh salmon, peas, sauce, and potatoes. The potatoes are delivered to the factory up to one month in advance. After the clean potatoes are peel and slices, after that potatoes are boil this process are compeletd then potatoes going to the chilli area, and after some minutes potatoes are store area. Turning to the fish preparation, the delivery of salmon slices is to be made to the factory with in 12 hours prior to the process. Then after salmon slices too add lemon juice and salt on the too then salmon going the steam oven after the workers doing remove the skins and bones then one main inspect the salmon. Next steps is to prepare peas and sauce then after they store the potatoes coming down and mix together. After the wrapping the pie going the microwaveable container then freeze. Then going the store or dispatch.
The diagram provide information about commercial production of frozen fish pies.

Overall
, it is
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clear
from the
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diagram and
we can
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see
the preparation of process is separate, and the main ingredients here are fresh salmon, peas, sauce, and potatoes.

The
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potatoes
are delivered
to the factory up to one month in advance. After the clean
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potatoes
are peel and slices, after that
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potatoes
are boil this process are
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compeletd
then
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potatoes
going to the
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chilli
area, and after
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some
minutes
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potatoes
are store area. Turning to the fish preparation, the delivery of salmon slices is to
be made
to the factory with in 12 hours prior to the process. Then after salmon slices too
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
lemon juice and salt on the too then salmon going the steam oven after the workers doing remove the skins and bones then one main inspect the salmon.
Next
steps
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is
to prepare peas and sauce then after they store the
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potatoes
coming down and mix together.

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After
the wrapping the pie going the microwaveable container then freeze. Then going the store or dispatch.
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IELTS academic The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
180 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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