Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The diagram shows the way in which natural gas is produced and transported to the consumer.

The diagram shows the way in which natural gas is produced and transported to the consumer. e0EA
The diagram shows the information about how natural gas is produced and transported to the consumers. There are two main features about the process. Firstly, we will figure out how gas is produced. People collect the gas from gas well and then move it to the gas processing station. Here, they seperate the crude gas into different kind for different uses. Secondly, a big van collects them and distributes to the consumers. These consumers are the gas station and the gas supply station. After that, the gas station will sell it to the people who use cars or other transportation. On the other side, the gas supply station will pack all the gas they have to sell to those people who own gas appliances. As we can see in the diagram, there are two kind of consumers and two kind of transporting the gas. The gas can be used in two ways also.
The diagram
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
the information about how natural
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gas
is produced
and transported to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
consumers
. There are two main features about the process.

Firstly
, we will figure out how
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gas
is produced
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
People
collect the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gas
from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gas
well and then
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
it to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gas
processing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
station
. Here, they
Possible spelling mistake found.
seperate
the crude
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gas
into
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
kind for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
uses
.

Secondly
, a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
van collects them and distributes to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
consumers
. These
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
consumers
are the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gas
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
station
and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gas
supply
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
station
. After that, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gas
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
station
will sell it to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
cars or other transportation. On the other side, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gas
supply
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
station
will pack all the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gas
they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
sell to those
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gas
appliances.

As we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
in the diagram, there are two
Possible agreement error. Did you mean "kinds"?
kind
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
consumers
and two
Possible agreement error. The noun 'kind' seems to be countable, so consider using: "kinds".
kind
of transporting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gas
. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
gas
can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
in two ways
also
.

IELTS academic The diagram shows the way in which natural gas is produced and transported to the consumer.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
153 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • The diagram shows the way in which natural gas is produced and transported to the consumer.