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The diagram shows the various stages of the manufactured production of food in the United States.

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The diagram shows the various stages of the manufactured production of food in the United States. Overall, The food obtained by the general public goes through numerous steps. Starting with materials for processing are sourced from a local animal farm and produced by factory. Following this, the serving of two different marketing will be used to disseminate the product. Originally, Produced and collected raw food materials, such as, such as vegetables, meat, milk, and fish, come from various of locations, most noticeably countryside and seas. After that, The uncooked ingredients are then transported to factories where they are treated and transformed into fresh and prepared food products. Following that, the productions were trucked to the distribution sector, where they were distributed around the country using different modes of transportation. At the distribution agents, firstly, food is supplied and delivered to types of restaurants, and also distribution partners. In the final wheel, Then product can be served as a retail meal. Then, each family will make the dish depending on their own cooking skills and the good food is ready to enjoy by households.
The diagram
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shows
the various stages of the manufactured production of
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food
in the United States.

Overall
, The
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food
obtained by the
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general public
goes through numerous steps. Starting with materials for processing
are sourced
from a local animal farm and produced by factory. Following this, the serving of two
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different
marketing will be
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used
to disseminate the product.

Originally
, Produced and collected raw
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food
materials, such as, such as vegetables, meat, milk, and fish,
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come
from various of locations, most
noticeably
countryside and seas. After that, The uncooked ingredients are then transported to factories where they
are treated
and transformed into fresh and prepared
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food
products. Following that, the productions
were trucked
to the distribution sector, where they
were distributed
around the country using
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different
modes of transportation.

At the distribution agents,
firstly
,
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food
is supplied
and delivered to types of restaurants, and
also
distribution partners. In the final wheel, Then product can
be served
as a retail meal. Then, each family will
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make
the dish depending on their
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own
cooking
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skills
and the
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good
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food
is ready to enjoy by households.
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IELTS academic The diagram shows the various stages of the manufactured production of food in the United States.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
183 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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