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The graph shows the percentage of women working in 6 countries in 1960, 1970 and 1980

The graph shows the percentage of women working in 6 countries in 1960, 1970 and 1980 EL2BM

Information concerning quantity of females working in 6 nations in 1960, 1970 and 1980 is shown in the bar chart. The data is given in percentage and can be split into 2 groups, slight changes and significant changes. Overall, it is obvious that the highest percentage of working-women in 1960 and 1970 was USSR. However, Sweden has overcome in the last period. To begin with, UK, USA and USSR all had a minimally change in amount of employed women. Despite having largest percentage in 1960 and 1970, USSR rate decreased marginally to approximately 65% in 1980. Following this, the smallest growth was in the percentage of UK: changing about 3% and end up with 52% in 1980. In addition, percentage of USA fluctuated from 41% to 50% and finish at 44% which is the least percentage compared to other countries in 1980. Noticeably changes have found in other 3 nations. Canada which has the largest growth soared from 31% and reached 51% in 1980. Moreover, working woman in Australia in the first year given was around 10% more than the percentage of Canada then short up to as same as Canada in 1980. Subsequently, Sweden percentage started as same as the percentage of Canada and Sweden in 1980 then increased for 18% to 70% in the last decade.

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