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The bar chart compares the amount of money got from the specific film industry annually over the period of 9 years.

The bar chart compares the amount of money got from the specific film industry annually over the period of 9 years. ndmYn
The bar chart compares the amount of money got from the specific film industry annually over the period of 9 years. In 2002, the rental fee charged the highest bill and was leading as a primary role. Over the following 5 years, the DVD sales overtook gradually and became the leader of the market. The films renting payment hold the largest amount, approximately 170, 000 sales whereas there was absolutely zero sale in the field of the Blu-ray production in 2002. The DVD manufacturing reached the peak of the sales with 220, 000 while the hire charge saw a declining amount in the year of 2007. In the same year, interestingly, although the VHS sales was down to zero, the sales of Blu-ray slightly increased but that amount was almost negligible. We can obviously see that the DVD selling was still leading the market for another 4 years. 2011 saw a decreasing number in the renting films fee, however, it saw the increasing number in the production of Blu-ray film.
The bar chart compares the
amount
of money
got
from the specific film industry
annually
over the period of 9 years.

In 2002, the rental fee charged the highest bill and was leading as a primary role. Over the following 5 years, the DVD
sales
overtook
gradually
and became the leader of the market.

The films renting payment hold the largest
amount
, approximately 170, 000
sales
whereas there was
absolutely
zero
sale
in the field of the Blu-ray production in 2002. The DVD manufacturing reached the peak of the
sales
with 220, 000 while the hire charge
saw
a declining
amount
in the
year
of 2007. In the same
year
,
interestingly
, although the VHS
sales
was down to zero, the
sales
of Blu-ray
slightly
increased
but
that
amount
was almost negligible.

We can
obviously
see
that the DVD selling was
still
leading the market for another 4 years. 2011
saw
a decreasing number in the renting films fee,
however
, it
saw
the increasing number in the production of Blu-ray film.
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