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The diagram shows the process of orange juice.

The diagram shows the process of orange juice. aQngw
The process illustrates how to produce orange juice. Overall, it is clear, that this process contains many steps, from the initial transport of oranges to factory to retailer shops for customers. In detail, fresh oranges are transported in a factory then all oranges are washed in a machine. After oranges are washed then some extra oranges are added. Further, this produces two things, one is waste solid which is used for animal feed. And, fresh juice is packed and available in the shops for customers, while some parts of the juice are transported in refrigerator trucks for evaporation. In the next step, water is released through evaporation and concentrate juice is released. This concentrated liquid is then canned. After that, cans are transported in a truck and are stored in a warehouse. In the last step, cans are further moved to the factory for packaging in which water is added with concentrate juice. After that juice is available for customers in shops.
The process illustrates how to produce orange
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juice
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Overall
, it is
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clear
, that this process contains
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many
steps, from the initial transport of oranges to factory to retailer shops for customers. In detail, fresh oranges
are transported
in a factory then all oranges
are washed
in a machine.
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After
oranges
are washed
then
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some
extra oranges are
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added
.
Further
, this produces two things, one is waste solid which is
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used
for animal feed. And, fresh
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juice
is packed
and available in the shops for customers, while
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some
parts of the
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juice
are transported
in refrigerator trucks for evaporation. In the
next
step, water
is released
through evaporation and concentrate
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juice
is released
. This concentrated liquid is then canned. After that, cans
are transported
in a truck and
are stored
in a warehouse. In the last step, cans are
further
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moved
to the factory for packaging in which water is
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added
with concentrate
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juice
. After that
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juice
is available for customers in shops.

IELTS academic The diagram shows the process of orange juice.

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162 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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