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The diagram shows the process of making of steel rods for the furniture industry.

The diagram shows the process of making of steel rods for the furniture industry. 0ppN3

First of all, iron ore, Yellow ore and carbon are collected to serve as a raw material for steel rods manufacturing. After that the raw material is melted in a melting slit, where it is heated to a temperature in range of 1300-1500 degree celsius. The melted mass is then transfered to a smelling cabin to undergo refinement. Next, the candescent metal is put in a pouring machine and poured into ingots. In the next stage, the ingots are connected to a cooling reserviour, where the temperature falls to 60-100 degree celsius. Metal goes through special nozzeles and cools down, forming strands. Following this the metal strands proceed to rollers that change their shape. Next, the products are put into a heating machine where they undergo heat treatment. Subsequently, a measuring automation completes a surface check of the products. After that, the metal rods are sized by special cutters and ID stamping. Finally the products undergo inspection and are ready for use.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
, iron ore, Yellow ore and carbon are collected
 to serve as a raw material for steel rods manufacturing. After that the raw material is melted
 in a melting slit, where it is heated
 to a temperature in range of 1300-1500 degree Possible spelling mistake found.Celsius
celsius
. The melted mass is then Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "transferred", the past tense form of the verb 'transfer'?transferredtransferee
transfered
 to a smelling cabin to undergo refinement. Next
, the Possible spelling mistake found.can descent
candescent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withalloyoreingothardwaremineral
metal
is put
 in a pouring machine and poured into ingots. In the next
 stage, the ingots are connected
 to a cooling Possible spelling mistake found.reservoir
reserviour
, where the temperature falls to 60-100 degree Possible spelling mistake found.Celsius
celsius
. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withalloyoreingothardwaremineral
Metal
 goes through special Possible spelling mistake found.nozzles
nozzeles
 and cools down, forming strands. Following this the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withalloyoreingothardwaremineral
metal
 strands proceed to rollers that This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteradjust
change
 their shape. Next
, the products are put
 into a heating machine where they undergo heat treatment. Subsequently
, a measuring automation completes a surface This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :monitor
check
 of the products. After that, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withalloyoreingothardwaremineral
metal
 rods are sized
 by special cutters and ID stamping. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Finally,
Finally
 the products undergo inspection and are ready for This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
. 