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The diagram shows the process of making cement and how it is used to produce concrete for building g purposes.

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The diagram below show the steps and supplies used in the cement making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. In the first step of cement production, put limestone and clay together and crushed them until they become powder. Secondly, going to the mixer to make sure they become one material and rotating them in the heater. Then, they must grinded and then they are ready to be in the bags. Now in the concrete production, we need to put several materials together such us, 15% of cement, 10% of water, 25% of sand, and 50% of gravel. After that, we mixed them all together.
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to produce concrete for building purposes. In the
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production, put limestone and clay together and crushed them until they become powder.
Secondly
, going to the mixer to
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sure they become one material and rotating them in the heater. Then, they
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grinded and
then they are ready to be in the bags.
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in the concrete production, we need to put several materials together such us, 15% of
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, 10% of water, 25% of sand, and 50% of gravel. After that, we mixed them all together.
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