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The diagram shows the process for labelling shellfish for the international market.

The diagram shows the process for labelling shellfish for the international market. 9agG3
The diagram illustrates how the process of monitoring and labelling shellfish are prepared for the international market. Overall, shellfish after catch experience the labelling, processing and transportation before being distributed in the international market at the end. In the beginning, Artisanal fishermen use GPS location devices on their boats to catch shellfish and when they catch, they send a signal of this device to the satellite which will be monitored by the workers in Santiago. After Catch the shellfish will be labelled and generated with a barcode label to be certified and to be eligible to use. After that, shellfish is sent to the processing plant which will make the products and make it available to be shipped. However, after that shellfish is then checked and verified, finally they will send it by planes before being transported by the trucks and they will distribute it to the international markets in different places.
The diagram illustrates how the process of monitoring and labelling
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shellfish
are prepared
for the international market.
Overall
,
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shellfish
after
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catch
experience the labelling, processing and transportation
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before
being distributed
in the international market at the
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end
.

In the beginning, Artisanal fishermen
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use
GPS location devices on their boats to
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catch
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shellfish
and when they
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catch
, they
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send
a signal of this device to the satellite which will
be monitored
by the workers in Santiago. After
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Catch
the
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shellfish
will
be labelled
and generated with a barcode label to
be certified
and to be eligible to
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use
.

After that,
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shellfish
is
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sent
to the processing plant which will
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make
the products and
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make
it available to
be shipped
.
However
, after that
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shellfish
is then
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checked
and verified,
finally
they will
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send
it by
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planes
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before
being transported
by the
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trucks and
they will distribute it to the international markets in
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different
places.

IELTS academic The diagram shows the process for labelling shellfish for the international market.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
152 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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