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The diagram shows the procedure for university entry for high school graduates

The given diagram illustrates the steps to get admitted in a university for a student who obtained high school graduation. Overall, there are three different procedures to be followed depending upon the response from the administration. As per the chart, once the high school is obtained, a student can fill in the application form. The form can be downloaded from the website of the university. After that a completed application form has to be sent to the administration, and the later can either reject, accept or ask for provisional acceptance which means more documents are required. The reply from the administration will be received in two weeks. The student needs to provide more documents if asked for. If the application is rejected, he can either cancel the application or fill in the form for alternative courses and submit it again to the administration. The student can get enrolled if he is accepted. Next, he has to choose the desired subjects, register with Dean and finally he gets admission to the university.
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diagram illustrates the steps to
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get
admitted in a university for a
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student
who obtained high school graduation.
Overall
, there are three
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different
procedures to
be followed
depending upon the response from the administration.

As per the chart, once the high school
is obtained
, a
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student
can fill in the
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application
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form
. The
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form
can
be downloaded
from the website of the university. After that a completed
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application
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form
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has to
be
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sent
to the administration, and the later can either reject, accept or
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ask for
provisional acceptance which means more documents
are required
. The reply from the administration will
be received
in two weeks.

The
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student
needs to provide more documents if
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asked for
. If the
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application
is rejected
, he can either cancel the
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application
or fill in the
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form
for alternative courses and submit it again to the administration. The
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student
can
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get
enrolled if he is
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accepted
.
Next
, he
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has to
choose the desired subjects, register with Dean and
finally
he
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gets
admission to the university.
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IELTS academic The diagram shows the procedure for university entry for high school graduates

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6.5
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