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The diagram shows the information about how a home smokery works.

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The process elucidates the information about how a home smokery works. Overall, it is ostensible that the process is comprised of the multifarious stages without any of which the process cannot be completed; however, it starts with the entrance of fresh air in the box, whereas culminates at cooking food. Moving on to the details, in the initial stage, there is an empty underground section with a lid on top at ground level. Fresh air is allowed to flow into the machine by opening the lid. After that the fresh air goes into the second part of the machine which is very similar to the first part. Then, fire is started by adding logs through the lid on top. Once the fire is burning, the heat from it is coursed through a narrow pipe that leads to a box. Shifting attention towards the remaining details, in the subsequent step, the box in the third part of the machine is located at ground level. In the box, the food items that need to be cooked are placed. In the penultimate stage, the heat coming from the second part of the machine cooks the food items.
The process elucidates the information about how a home
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smokery
works.

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, it is ostensible that the process
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is comprised of
the multifarious stages without any of which the process cannot
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, it
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with the entrance of fresh air in the box, whereas culminates at cooking food.

Moving on to the
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details
, in the initial stage, there is an empty underground section with a lid on top at ground level. Fresh air is
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allowed
to flow into the
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machine
by opening the lid.
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After
that the fresh air goes into the second
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part
of the
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machine
which is
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very
similar to the
first
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part
. Then, fire is
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started
by adding logs through the lid on top. Once the fire is burning, the heat from it
is coursed
through a narrow pipe that leads to a box.

Shifting attention towards the remaining
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details
, in the subsequent step, the box in the third
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part
of the
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machine
is located
at ground level. In the box, the food items that need to
be cooked
are placed
. In the penultimate stage, the heat coming from the second
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part
of the
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machine
cooks the food items.
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IELTS academic The diagram shows the information about how a home smokery works.

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4 paragraphs
194 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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