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The diagram shows the formation of a glacier.

The diagram shows the formation of a glacier. a7KNm
The diagram shows how a glacier is formed and how it moves and changes. • It is clear that there are six stages in the formation of a glacier. We can see that the process of glacier formation starts from the fall of snow on the top of a mountain to the flow of the river to the sea. • The process begins when a large amount of snow falls on the top of a mountain. Because the temperature at the top of a mountain is very low, this snow never melts. After more snow falls on top of it, the snow turns to ice. Next, a lot of ice is packed together, and then it forms a glacier. After that, the glacier becomes very heavy and it starts to move slowly down the mountain. • The process continues with rocks underneath the glacier being picked up and carried along. And then, when the glacier reaches the bottom of the mountain, it starts to melt. The ice from the glacier is turned into meltwater. This meltwater becomes a river and the rocks from the glacier are deposited on the riverbed. At the final stage, the river flows to the sea.
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. We can
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that the process of
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formation
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from the fall of
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snow
on the
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top
of a
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mountain
to the flow of the river to the sea. • The process
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begins
when a large amount of
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snow
falls on the
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top
of a
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mountain
.
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Because
the temperature at the
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top
of a
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mountain
is
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very
low, this
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snow
never melts. After more
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snow
falls on
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top
of it, the
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turns to ice.
Next
,
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glacier
. After that, the
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becomes
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heavy and it
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starts
to
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move
slowly
down the
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mountain
. • The process continues with rocks underneath the
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glacier
being picked
up and carried along. And then, when the
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glacier
reaches the bottom of the
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mountain
, it
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starts
to melt. The ice from the
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glacier
is turned
into meltwater. This meltwater becomes a river and the rocks from the
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are deposited
on the riverbed. At the final stage, the river flows to the sea.
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IELTS academic The diagram shows the formation of a glacier.

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