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The diagram shows the environmental issues raised by a product over it's life cycle.

The diagram depits the impact of a product on an environmental during it's lifetime. Overall, seven steps are involved starting from planning and design and culminating in recycling. First, the product is planned and designed with the aid of a computer, then the designed products are conveyed by a truck to an industrial area where the materials and energy resources are consumed, this is followed by production which is the next stage after which the are packaged and distributed to shops and houses for sales. After the packaged products have been disseminated to different homes and shops for purchases, they are being used by the consumers who in turn dispose the remnants of the used goods. Once the used products are thrown away, they are picked up again for recycling which is the final stage. Feedback is also given and the steps begin again,
The diagram
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the impact of a
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product
on an environmental during
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it's
lifetime.

Overall
, seven steps
are involved
starting from planning and design and culminating in recycling.
First
, the
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product
is planned
and designed with the aid of a computer, then the designed
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products
are conveyed
by a truck to an industrial area where the materials and energy resources
are consumed
, this
is followed
by production which is the
next
stage after which the
are packaged
and distributed to shops and
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houses
for sales.

After the packaged
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products
have
been disseminated
to
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different
homes and shops for
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purchases
, they are being
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used
by the consumers who in turn dispose the remnants of the
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used
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goods
. Once the
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used
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products
are thrown
away, they
are picked
up again for recycling which is the final stage. Feedback is
also
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given
and the steps
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begin
again,

IELTS academic The diagram shows the environmental issues raised by a product over it's life cycle.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
144 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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