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The chart below show the number of Japanese tourists traveling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market (IELTS BOOK 3 TEST 1)

The bar chart demonstrates how many Japanese travelers went overseas on their holidays over a decade while the line graph shows the proportion of Japanese tourists chose Australia as their vacation destination during the same period. Overall, it is clear that there is an upward trend in the number of Japanese citizens traveled abroad and that the percentage of them visiting Australia rose gradually over the given period. In 1985, the number of Japanese people traveling to foreign countries was merely 5 million which had increased steadily to approximately 11 million by 1990 before falling slightly in 1991. In the next two years, the figures remained relatively stable, with about 12 million before rising again to around 15 million by the end of the period. In the beginning of the period, Although Australia had not have any place in Japanese tourist market, it raised its share to around 5% by the year 1989. Afterwards, there was a marginal drop to just above 4% in the proportion of Japanese visitors who traveled to Australia, followed by a gradual increase to just above 6% by 1994. Finally, the percentage fell again to 6% in the last year.

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