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The diagram shows the concrete and cement are produced

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The picture illustrates the process by which is manufactured, and how to product is used to produce concrete materials. In generall, the process consist of seven stages, beginning with crushing products and ending with mixing. It is clear to see that all steps are linked to each other respectively. First of all, limestone and clay are crushed by special machine. Once powder has been interposed into the mixer, the product is mixed in order to make the phase ready for the next stage. Then process is continued by the help of rotating heater together with heat. Brmefore packaging the cement into bags, the semi ready product is grinded by grinder. Following this, the process comes to the next stage in which some materials are mixed again by concrete mixer. Such as smallstones, sand, cement and water. The final stage is that the concrete was ready for building purpose and to sell
The picture illustrates the
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process
by which
is manufactured
, and how to
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product
is
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used
to produce concrete materials.

In
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generall
, the
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process
consist of seven
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stages
, beginning with crushing
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products
and ending with mixing. It is
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clear
to
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see
that all steps
are linked
to each other
respectively
.

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First of all
, limestone and clay
are crushed
by special machine. Once powder has
been interposed
into the mixer, the
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product
is mixed
in order to
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make
the phase ready for the
next
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stage
. Then
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process
is continued
by the
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help
of rotating heater together with heat.
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Brmefore
packaging the cement into bags, the semi ready
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product
is
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grinded
by grinder.

Following this, the
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process
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comes
to the
next
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stage
in which
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some
materials
are mixed
again by concrete mixer. Such as
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smallstones
, sand, cement and water. The final
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stage
is that the concrete was ready for building purpose and to
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sell
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IELTS academic The diagram shows the concrete and cement are produced

Academic
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150 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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