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THE DIAGRAM SHOWS PRODUCTION OF SUGAR BY A GERMAN COMPANY FOR SUPERMARKETS AND RESTAURANTS

THE DIAGRAM SHOWS PRODUCTION OF SUGAR BY A GERMAN COMPANY FOR SUPERMARKETS AND RESTAURANTS 2aWKJ
THE DIAGRAM REVEALS VARIOUS STAGES OF MANUFACTURING SUGAR BY A GERMAN INDUSTRY FOR SUPERMARKETS. OVERALL, THE PROCESS INVOLVES A TOTAL OF EIGHT STAGES STARTING WITH SUGARCANE HARVEST AND ENDS IN DELIVERY TO SUPERMARKETS AND RESTAURANTS. AS THE PICTURE DEPICTS, SUGARCANE IS HARVESTED FROM TROPICAL REGIONS FIRSTLY. THEN, THE JUICE IS COLLECTED FROM SUGARCANE USING A CRUSHER. IN THE THIRD STAGE, THE COLLECTED JUICE IS PARTIALY FILTRATED TO COLLECT RAW SUGAR. SUBSEQUENTLY, THE PARTIAL FILTERED SUGAR IS SHIPPED TO GERMANY. SINCE IT IS PARTIALY FILTERED, ITS COMPLETE PURIFICATION IS DONE THROUGH MELTING AND FILTERING. AFTER THE FOURTH STEP, THE SUGAR SYRUP IS CRYSTALIZED. IN THE SIXTH STAGE, THE SUGAR CRYSTALS ARE PACKED AND LABELED. IN THE FINAL STAGE, THE PACKED SUAGR PACKETS ARE DELIVERED TO SUPERMARKETS AND RESTAURANTS.
THE DIAGRAM REVEALS VARIOUS
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STAGES
OF MANUFACTURING
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SUGAR
BY A GERMAN INDUSTRY FOR SUPERMARKETS.
OVERALL
, THE PROCESS INVOLVES A TOTAL OF EIGHT
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STAGES
STARTING WITH SUGARCANE HARVEST AND ENDS IN DELIVERY TO SUPERMARKETS AND RESTAURANTS. AS THE PICTURE DEPICTS, SUGARCANE
IS HARVESTED
FROM TROPICAL REGIONS
FIRSTLY
. THEN, THE JUICE
IS COLLECTED
FROM SUGARCANE USING A CRUSHER. IN THE THIRD
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STAGE
, THE COLLECTED JUICE IS
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PARTIALY
FILTRATED TO COLLECT RAW
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SUGAR
.
SUBSEQUENTLY
, THE PARTIAL FILTERED
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SUGAR
IS SHIPPED
TO GERMANY. SINCE IT IS
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PARTIALY
FILTERED, ITS COMPLETE PURIFICATION
IS DONE
THROUGH MELTING AND FILTERING. AFTER THE FOURTH STEP, THE
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SUGAR
SYRUP IS
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CRYSTALIZED
. IN THE SIXTH
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STAGE
, THE
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SUGAR
CRYSTALS
ARE PACKED
AND LABELED. IN THE FINAL
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STAGE
, THE PACKED
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SUAGR
PACKETS
ARE DELIVERED
TO SUPERMARKETS AND RESTAURANTS.
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