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A survey was conducted to find out how adults in Brazil spent their spare time in 2005

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The two pie charts indicate how Brazilians over 18 spent their free time was conducted by the survey in 2005. Overall, there was a big gap between the activities of men and women. One of the most prominent features of this chart is that, while the number of men who chose to play golf made up 61%, drinking was the least chosen activity with only 7%. Following that playing soccer and going camping were also enjoyed by men by 21% and 11% respectively. By far, go shopping occupies 75%, which is the highest rate almost all women are interested in. Similarly, 15% of doing yoga and 8% of going camping also took the second and the third place of the chart and reading books which only had a tiny minority of women chosen with 2%.
The two pie charts indicate how Brazilians over 18 spent their free time
was conducted
by the survey in 2005.

Overall
, there was a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
gap between the activities of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
and women.

One of the most prominent features of this chart is that, while the number of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
who chose to play golf made up 61%, drinking was the least chosen activity with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
7%. Following that playing soccer and going camping were
also
enjoyed by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
by 21% and 11%
respectively
.

By far, go shopping occupies 75%, which is the highest rate almost all women
are interested
in.
Similarly
, 15% of doing yoga and 8% of going camping
also
took the second and the third place of the chart and reading books which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
had a tiny minority of women chosen with 2%.
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IELTS academic A survey was conducted to find out how adults in Brazil spent their spare time in 2005

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