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The diagram shows how to make carbonated drinks.

The diagram shows how to make carbonated drinks. 30E1l
The diagram illustrates the apparatus and phases of producing carbonated drinks. Overall, it is apparent from the chart that there are five stages in this man-made process, commencing with water cleaning and culminating in labeling and sealing the carbonated drinks. The process initiates with the water being filtered. The raw water are cleaned by adding chemicals before the process of filtration. In the following stage, water is pumped via pope's to a electric heaters. In the second stage of the process, cleaned water is collected in a electric heaters in order to heat the water. Then, it produces the evaporation and the vapour of water is transferred through cooling pipe. Similarly, the mixture of evaporation and carbon dioxide create carbonated water. In the subsequent stage, the carbonated water is sent to mixing tank through a pipe. Likewise, carbonated water is rotated with adding colour, flavour and syrup. The fourth stage consists filtering and filling bottles. The final stage concludes with the bottles being packed and marketed for sale in the supermarkets by a truck.
The diagram illustrates the apparatus and phases of producing
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carbonated
drinks.

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, it is apparent from the chart that there are five
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stages
in this
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man
-made
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process
, commencing with
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water
cleaning and culminating in labeling and sealing the
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carbonated
drinks.

The
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process
initiates with the
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water
being filtered
. The raw
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water
are cleaned
by adding chemicals
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before
the
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process
of filtration. In the following
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stage
,
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water
is pumped
via pope's to
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a
electric
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heaters
. In the second
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stage
of the
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process
, cleaned
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water
is collected
in
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a
electric
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heaters
in order to heat the
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water
. Then, it produces the evaporation and the
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vapour
of
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water
is transferred
through cooling pipe.
Similarly
, the mixture of evaporation and carbon dioxide create
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carbonated
water.

In the subsequent
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stage
, the
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carbonated
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water
is
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sent
to mixing tank through a pipe.
Likewise
,
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carbonated
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water
is rotated
with adding
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colour
,
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flavour
and syrup. The fourth
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stage
consists filtering and filling bottles. The final
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stage
concludes with the bottles
being packed
and marketed for sale in the supermarkets by a truck.
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IELTS academic The diagram shows how to make carbonated drinks.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
174 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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