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The diagram shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town

The diagram illustrates the production of safe, drinkable water through the collection of rainwater, to be supplied to an Australian town. Overall, the diagram depicts the different processes involved in the collection and treatment of rainwater, and the final outcome of the said process. As rain pours down on Australian households, the recycling of rainwater has now commenced. The beginning of the procedure involves draining the collected rainwater from numerous Australian households. The water is passed through a water filter before it accumulates in a water storage located underground. The stored water is chemically treated before it becomes safe to drink by the townspeople. The chemically treated water is pumped up towards Australian households and are now viable for drinking. To conclude, the diagram illustrates how the Australians have come up a way to recycle rainwater and utilize it as their source of drinking water. It involves a rigorous process that makes sure that the outcome will be a safe water to drink.
The diagram illustrates the production of safe, drinkable
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water
through the collection of
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rainwater
, to
be supplied
to an Australian town.
Overall
, the diagram depicts the
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different
processes involved in the collection and treatment of
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rainwater
, and the final outcome of the said process.

As rain pours down on Australian households, the recycling of
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rainwater
has
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now
commenced. The beginning of the procedure involves draining the collected
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rainwater
from numerous Australian households. The
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water
is passed
through a
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water
filter
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before
it accumulates in a
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water
storage located underground. The stored
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water
is
chemically
treated
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before
it becomes safe to drink by the townspeople. The
chemically
treated
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water
is pumped
up towards Australian households and are
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now
viable for drinking.

To conclude
, the diagram illustrates how the Australians have
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come
up a way to recycle
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rainwater
and utilize it as their source of drinking
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water
. It involves a rigorous process that
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makes
sure that the outcome will be a safe
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water
to drink.
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IELTS academic The diagram shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town

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  American English
3 paragraphs
163 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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