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The diagram shows how apple is canned

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The diagram illustrates the process of the how fresh apple canned. Overall, process consists of fourteen stages, beginning with the hand picking and ending up with a product's despatch. First of all, apple is picked from tree by hand. After that, transported to the cannery by big trucks. At the cannery apple is washed and checked quality of it, and any poor quality apple is refused. Next, quality apple is goes to cold storage. After that, when it is ready for canning the apple is weighted and graded. Then, apple is peeled and cores are removed. It is then divided into same sizes and put into cans. Next, sealed to cupping glass. Following this, carefully cooked or sterilised. After that, pots are labelled and they are placed into storage. The canned apple is ready to be dispatched to supermarkets and sold.
The diagram illustrates the process of
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the how
fresh
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apple
canned.
Overall
, process consists of fourteen stages, beginning with the
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hand picking
and ending up with a product's despatch.

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First of all
,
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apple
is picked
from tree by hand. After that, transported to the cannery by
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big
trucks. At the cannery
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apple
is washed
and
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checked
quality of it, and any poor quality
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apple
is refused
.
Next
, quality
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apple
is goes to
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cold
storage. After that, when it is ready for canning the
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apple
is weighted
and graded. Then,
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apple
is peeled
and cores
are removed
. It is then divided into same sizes and put into cans.
Next
, sealed to cupping glass. Following this,
carefully
cooked or
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sterilised
.

After that, pots are
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labelled and
they
are placed
into storage. The canned
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apple
is ready to be
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dispatched
to supermarkets and sold.
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IELTS academic The diagram shows how apple is canned

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  American English
3 paragraphs
141 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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