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The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016.

The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016. EEKL
The graph illustrates the stock price of four technology companies over the period of 2011 until 2016. Overall, there is a gradual increase in the price of stock of Facebook. Along with a decrease in the prices of Yahoo, while the prices of stock of Apple varied significantly differing from google which did not. It should be noted that the graph demonstrates a continuous growth of the prices of Facebook, because the price grew from around 7, 500 in 2011 to 20000 in 2016. Meanwhile, despite starting at the same price as Facebook in 2011, the price the Yahoo fell to under 3000 in 2016. Apart from the graph illustrates that Apple, whose price was 5000 in 2011, in spite of having the strongest growth until 2012 when the price of a share was 35000 showed a dramatic fall in stock prices, until 2013 when it slightly recovered only to fall again, it then recuperated some of its losses to cost 6000 per share in 2016. Alternatively, google did not vary whatsoever, with no changes over the period of 2011 until 2016, its price being consistently at 1000.
The graph illustrates the stock
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price
of four technology
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companies
over the period of 2011 until 2016.

Overall
, there is a gradual increase in the
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price
of stock of Facebook. Along with a decrease in the
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prices
of Yahoo, while the
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prices
of stock of Apple varied
significantly
differing from google which did not.

It should
be noted
that the graph demonstrates a continuous growth of the
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prices
of Facebook,
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because
the
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price
grew from around 7, 500 in 2011 to 20000 in 2016. Meanwhile, despite starting at the same
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price
as Facebook in 2011, the
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price
the Yahoo fell to under 3000 in 2016.

Apart from the graph illustrates that Apple, whose
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price
was 5000 in 2011,
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in spite of
having the strongest growth until 2012 when the
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price
of a share was 35000
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showed
a dramatic fall in stock
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prices
, until 2013 when it
slightly
recovered
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only
to fall again, it then recuperated
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some
of its losses to cost 6000 per share in 2016.
Alternatively
, google did not vary whatsoever, with no
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changes
over the period of 2011 until 2016, its
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price
being
consistently
at 1000.
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IELTS academic The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016.

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