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Question: The diagrams below show the coastal village of Seaville in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

Question: The diagrams below show the coastal village of Seaville in 1980 and 2010. Qm13
It is often claimed that many regions of the world are interesing wider between the rich and the poor people. While, the problems that result are difficult. Principally solutions based on deployment education should be adopted to combat this problem. On the one hand, in the economic growth of a country and the security of its citizens influence increasing levels of poverty and growing wealth inequalities. Firstly, domestic businesses are directly affects, such as local shops and factories, cause of the existence of a large mass of unemployed or low-paid workers in economic terms. Secondly, if unemployment had increased among young people, criminal world would have risen; such as drug trafficking, prostitution, robbery and violent attacks on others. On the other hand, governments must reduce the gap between the rich and the poor that expand educational opportunities to benefit all their citizens. And also, they don't have the funds to buy their products, they are forced to close, resulting in unemployment. This mean that educational attainment of children enable to reach a higher level at the schooling in slim areas of cities and in poor rural regions. Grands and scholarship could be used to help students to remain in education for longer and gain qualifications. In particular, it is possible to expond all technical educational to help poor young people studying in schools and vocational colleges to learn professins. In construction, engineering and agriculture, a helping- educated workforce will be needed in the future, and skilled workers will be able to command high salaries and enjoy a decent standard of living. In conclusion, by addressing the root causes of many problems by expanding educational opportunities, the government may increase the likelihood of narrowing the gap between the rich and the poor in society.
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claimed that
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many
regions of the world are
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interesing
wider between the rich and the
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poor
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people
.
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While
, the problems that result are difficult.
Principally
solutions based on deployment education should
be adopted
to combat this problem.

On the one hand, in the economic growth of a country and the security of its citizens influence increasing levels of poverty and growing wealth inequalities.
Firstly
, domestic businesses are
directly
affects, such as local shops and factories, cause of the existence of a large mass of unemployed or low-paid workers in economic terms.
Secondly
, if unemployment had increased among young
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people
, criminal world would have risen; such as drug trafficking, prostitution, robbery and violent attacks on others.

On the other hand
,
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governments
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must
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reduce
the gap between the rich and the
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poor
that expand
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educational
opportunities to benefit all their citizens. And
also
, they don't have the funds to
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buy
their products, they
are forced
to close, resulting in unemployment. This mean that
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educational
attainment of children enable to reach a higher level at the schooling in slim areas of cities and in
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poor
rural regions. Grands and scholarship could be
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used
to
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help
students to remain in education for longer and gain qualifications.
In particular
, it is possible to
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expond
all technical
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educational
to
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help
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poor
young
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people
studying in schools and vocational colleges to learn
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professins
. In construction, engineering and agriculture, a helping- educated workforce will
be needed
in the future, and skilled workers will be able to command high salaries and enjoy a decent standard of living.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
conclusion, by addressing the root causes of
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many
problems by expanding
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educational
opportunities, the
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government
may increase the likelihood of narrowing the gap between the rich and the
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poor
in society.
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IELTS academic Question: The diagrams below show the coastal village of Seaville in 1980 and 2010.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
293 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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