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The diagram shows the process of growing bananas for selling in supermarkets.

Today, technology more and more advanced, so the process of making cherry jam not except. The process contains 9 stage to create the delicious and qualified cherry jam. Begin with a sheet is spreading on the ground and the tree is shaking to get the cherries. Ending with a label is sticking on the jars. The first thing, a sheet is spread on the ground and the tree is shaken to get the cherries. Next step, the cherries are collected and are transported to the processing plant. After that the leaves and stems are removed from the cherries, the cherries are washed by water. The stone is took out of the middle of the cherries. In the next stage, the cherries are cook and extra ingredients are added such as lemon juice, sugar and pectin. The quality of the jar is carefully checked. In the next step, the jam is put into jars. Final stage, a label is stuck on the jars.
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Today
, technology more and more advanced,
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so
the process of making cherry jam not except.

The process contains 9 stage to create the delicious and qualified cherry jam.
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Begin
with a sheet is spreading on the ground and the tree is shaking to
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get
the
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cherries
. Ending with a label is sticking on the jars.

The
first
thing, a sheet
is spread
on the ground and the tree
is shaken
to
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get
the
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cherries
.
Next
step, the
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cherries
are collected
and
are transported
to the processing plant. After that the
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leaves
and stems
are removed
from the
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cherries
, the
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cherries
are washed
by water. The stone is
Consider using either the past participle “taken” or the present participle “taking” here.
took
out of the middle of the cherries.

In the
next
stage, the
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cherries
are cook and extra ingredients are
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added
such as lemon juice, sugar and pectin. The quality of the jar is
carefully
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checked
. In the
next
step, the jam
is put
into jars. Final stage, a label
is stuck
on the jars.
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IELTS academic The diagram shows the process of growing bananas for selling in supermarkets.

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4 paragraphs
162 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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