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The diagram shows how a type of tent called a tepee is built. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram showing the process how to builds a tent, which is called tepee. The process consist the 8 steps needed to build a tepee. Starting with 3 sticks fastened by a rope and ends by attaching the canvas to the ground to form the tepee Firstly you need 3 sticks off wood is tied by rope together. You must pulled to built frame with 3 leg. Secondly take more sticks to make the tripod to consolidate its structure more solid, which is called tripod, all the sticks are tied by the rope for stability position and not easy to dropped because if you dropped it you have to do again it's made you tired. Next, took a canvas opened it's and wrapped around the tripod, Thirdly canvas tied to each sticks. Then the metal pins are use attach the canvas. Finally the bottom of the canvas by using ropes. Now the tepee is finished
The diagram showing the process how to builds a tent, which
is called
tepee. The process consist the 8 steps needed to build a tepee. Starting with 3
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sticks
fastened by a
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rope
and ends by attaching the
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canvas
to the ground to form the tepee

Firstly
you need 3
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sticks
off wood
is tied
by
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rope
together. You
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must
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pulled
to built frame with 3 leg.
Secondly
take more
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sticks
to
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make
the tripod to consolidate its structure more solid, which
is called
tripod, all the
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sticks
are tied
by the
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rope
for stability position and not easy to dropped
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because
if you dropped it you
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have to
do again it's made you tired.
Next
, took a
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canvas
opened it's and wrapped around the tripod,
Thirdly
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canvas
tied to each
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sticks
. Then the metal pins are
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use
attach the
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canvas
.
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Finally
the bottom of the
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canvas
by using
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ropes
.
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Now
the tepee is
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finished

IELTS academic The diagram shows how a type of tent called a tepee is built.

Academic
  American English
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154 words
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