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The diagram shows a process by which a tourist resort will improve

The diagram shows a process by which a tourist resort will improve GN9DQ
This diagram illustrates how a tourist place can evolve to be a popular place for more visitors. Indeed, this is a Demonstrative of a strategi which by performing it step by step, a reduction in the money leakage in a tourist resort is expected. Firstly, structing new hotels attracts various firms moreover, creat job oppurtunities wether directly in the hotels or indirectly by providing demands for local businesses such as supply services. Secondely, more provided jobs not only brings more furtune in the local region through incomes and taxes, but also this revenue is utilized in a way to improve the infrastructures and tourist services. Inaddition to this, these particular actions make the place look much facinating to travel to. Therefore, the resort would be a famous place to travel to and brings lots of tourists for visiting to or investing in.
This diagram illustrates how a
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tourist
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can evolve to be a popular
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place
for more visitors.

Indeed
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strategi
which by performing it step by step, a reduction in the money leakage in a
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tourist
resort is
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.

Firstly
,
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new hotels attracts various firms
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,
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job
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oppurtunities
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wether
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by providing demands for local businesses such as supply services.

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, more provided jobs not
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brings more
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in the local region through incomes and taxes,
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also
this revenue
is utilized
in a way to
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improve
the infrastructures and
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tourist
services.
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Inaddition
to this, these particular actions
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make
the
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look much
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facinating
to travel to.
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, the resort would be a
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famous
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place
to travel to and brings lots of
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tourists
for visiting to or investing in.
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IELTS academic The diagram shows a process by which a tourist resort will improve

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  American English
4 paragraphs
142 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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