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Changes to a bookstore since 2000

Changes to a bookstore since 2000 Wglbe
The two diagrams describe changes which have happened to a particular bookstore since 2000 up to the present. Overall, the structure of the store has been transformed significantly, becoming a lot more convenient for its users. It is also noticeable that, more developments were made on the left side of the building. There was a large section called fiction on the left side in 2000. However, this department has been separated into four sections displaying books on art, hobbies, cookery and fiction. The other fiction in the rear left corner is now employed to sell non-fiction books while former non-fiction sector has been replaced by a cafe which is located on the right side. However, the area for travel books, new books and service desk hasn't been changed over the years.
The two diagrams
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describe
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changes
which have happened to a particular bookstore since 2000 up to the present.

Overall
, the structure of the store has
been transformed
significantly
, becoming a lot more convenient for its users. It is
also
noticeable that, more developments
were made
on the
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left
side of the building.

There was a large section called fiction on the
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left
side in 2000.

However
, this department has
been separated
into four sections displaying
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books
on art, hobbies, cookery and fiction.

The other fiction in the rear
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left
corner is
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now
employed to sell non-fiction
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books
while former non-fiction sector has
been replaced
by a
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cafe
which
is located
on the right side.

However
, the area for travel
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books
, new
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books
and service desk hasn't been
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changed
over the years.
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IELTS academic Changes to a bookstore since 2000

Academic
  American English
6 paragraphs
131 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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