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The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. YlnV
The diagram explains the way in which bricks are made for the building industry. Overall, there are seven stages in the process, beginning with the digging up of clay and culminating in delivery. To begin, the clay used to make the bricks is dug up from the ground by a large digger. This clay is then placed onto a metal grid, which is used to break up the clay into smaller pieces. A roller assists in this process. Following this, sand and water are added to the clay, and this mixture is turned into bricks by either placing it into a mould or using a wire cutter. Next, these bricks are placed in an oven to dry for 24 – 48 hours. In the subsequent stage, the bricks go through a heating and cooling process. They are heated in a kiln at a moderate and then a high temperature (ranging from 200c to 1300c), followed by a cooling process in a chamber for 2 – 3 days. Finally, the bricks are packed and delivered to their destinations.
The diagram
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explains
the way in which
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bricks
are made
for the building industry.
Overall
, there are seven stages in the process, beginning with the digging up of
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clay
and culminating in delivery.

To
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begin
, the
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clay
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used
to
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make
the
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bricks
is dug
up from the ground by a large digger. This
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clay
is then placed onto a metal grid, which is
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used
to break up the
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clay
into smaller pieces. A roller assists in this process.

Following this, sand and water are
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added
to the
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clay
, and this mixture
is turned
into
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bricks
by either placing it into a
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mould
or using a wire cutter.
Next
, these
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bricks
are placed
in an oven to dry for 24 – 48 hours.

In the subsequent stage, the
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bricks
go through a heating and cooling process. They
are heated
in a kiln at a moderate and then a high temperature (ranging from 200c to 1300c), followed by a cooling process in a chamber for 2 – 3 days.
Finally
, the
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bricks
are packed
and delivered to their destinations.
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IELTS academic The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.

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