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The diagram illustrates the procedure of aluminum cans which are recycled.

The diagram illustrates the procedure of aluminum cans which are recycled. PR7yB
First, used cans are through to the bin. Second, these are collected by the manual staff. After that, these cans are cleaned, sorted shredded, and compressed. Moreover, these are heated and melted. Then, they are rolled about 2. 5 millimeters to 6 millimeters thick. Further, these are recycled. Next, reused cans are recycled by 74 percentage by the United Kingdom. Lastly, the aluminum cans are then repeatedly recycled.
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,
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used
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cans
are through to the bin. Second, these
are collected
by the manual staff. After that, these
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cans
are cleaned
, sorted shredded, and compressed.
Moreover
, these
are heated
and melted. Then, they
are rolled
about 2. 5 millimeters to 6 millimeters thick.
Further
, these
are recycled
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Next
, reused
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cans
are recycled
by 74 percentage by the United Kingdom.
Lastly
, the aluminum
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cans
are then
repeatedly
recycled.
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IELTS academic The diagram illustrates the procedure of aluminum cans which are recycled.

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