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The diagram illustrates the life cycle to create a product and the consequences towards the environment.

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The diagram illustrates the life cycle to create a product and the consequences towards the environment. There are seven main steps in the process of producing a product. Firstly, the product manufacturer plans and designs the item. Next, necessary materials and energy resources are consumed to carry out the third step which is production. This could be harmful towards the environment since factories will let out hazardous gases like carbon dioxide and sulphur dioxide creating air pollution. The fourth step is packaging and distribution. The diagram shows products being packed using bags which could potentially be detrimental to the environment if plastic was being used since it is not biodegradable. After that, they are being sold in retail stores. Customers who bought the products will either dispose or recycle them. Recycling will obviously be a great way in practising greener habits to save mother Earth. If not disposed of properly, it can often impact the ecosystem and environment. Finally, customers provide feedback to the manufacturers so that they can improve the quality of the product planning in future.
The diagram illustrates the life cycle to create a
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product
and the
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consequences towards
the

environment. There are seven main steps in the process of producing a product.

Firstly
, the
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product
manufacturer plans and designs the item.
Next
, necessary materials and

energy resources
are consumed
to carry out the third step which is production. This could be

harmful towards the environment since factories will
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let
out hazardous gases like carbon dioxide

and
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sulphur
dioxide creating air pollution. The fourth step is packaging and distribution. The

diagram
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shows
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products
being packed
using bags which could
potentially
be detrimental to the

environment if plastic was being
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used
since it is not biodegradable. After that, they are
being sold
in retail stores.

Customers who
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bought
the
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products
will either dispose or recycle them. Recycling will
obviously


be a great way in
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practising
greener habits to save mother Earth. If not disposed of
properly
, it

can
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often
impact the ecosystem and environment.
Finally
, customers provide feedback to the

manufacturers
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so
that they can
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improve
the quality of the
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product
planning
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in future
.
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IELTS academic The diagram illustrates the life cycle to create a product and the consequences towards the environment.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
178 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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