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The diagram illustrates the levels and equipment that is needed in order to make cement, and how building purpose concrete is made from cement.

The diagram illustrates the levels and equipment that is needed in order to make cement, and how building purpose concrete is made from cement. NwDMd

Overall, cement is made from two elements, limestone and clay which pass through a series of processes turning it into the final product. Similarly, concrete is made from concrete and three other elements that are mixed together. Limestone and clay are passed through a crusher and mixed before it can be sent through the rotating heater, after this, the heat is let through out from a container while the rest of the mix goes through a belt with a grinder on the end. Eventually, the mix coming out of the grinder is cement and they are packed in bags to be carried away. Making concrete has less processes as compared to making cement, just 10% of water and 15% cement is needed while sand and small stones, also known as gravels take up quarter and a half of the mix, these are then churned around in a concrete mixer and thus concrete is produced.

Overall
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cement
is made
 from two elements, limestone and clay which pass You use this word too often, consider replacing it withover
through
 a series of processes turning it into the final product. Similarly
, concrete is made
 from concrete and three other elements that are mixed
 together.

Limestone and clay are passed
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through
 a crusher and mixed This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 it can be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmitted
sent
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through
 the rotating heater, after this, the heat is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
let
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through out
 from a container while the rest of the mix goes You use this word too often, consider replacing it withover
through
 a belt with a grinder on the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
. Eventually
, the mix coming out of the grinder is Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).cement, and
cement and
 they are packed
 in bags to be carried
 away.

Making concrete has Did you mean "fewer"? The noun processes is countable.fewer
less
 processes as compared to making You use this word too often, consider replacing it withadhesiveplastermudsand
cement
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 10% of water and 15% You use this word too often, consider replacing it withadhesiveplastermudsand
cement
is needed
 while sand and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
small
 stones, also
 known as gravels take up quarter and a half of the mix, these are then churned around in a concrete mixer and thus
 concrete is produced
. 

IELTS academic The diagram illustrates the levels and equipment that is needed in order to make cement, and how building purpose concrete is made from cement.

Academic

American English

3 paragraphs

154 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Lexical Resource: 5.5

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Grammatical Range: 6.5

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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