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A glance at that bar chart provided reveals the number of UK citizens who ate junk food regularly throughout year from 2003 to 2013.

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A glance at that bar chart provided reveals the number of UK citizens who ate junk food regularly throughout year from 2003 to 2013. As it can be seen from the chart, eating fast once a week and once or twice a month were dominated in each year. Looking at the information in more details, we can see that, once a week hold on as gigamont in the whole graph and that the biggest percentage in 2006 than the other days, at more or less 35 per cent. Several times a week and twice a month were equal to 20 percent and quarter. There was a high difference between a few times a year and everyday as well as never, at 15 percent this was higher than the later lines roughly one in twenty in 2006 Also note worthy is the fact that, in 2013 was eating more fast food occured once or twice a week that the highest figure out of 1 year. Once a week as popular as the former trend at 27 per cent. In addition a few times a year and several times a week were stand at same degree that was 15 per cent, furthermore the remained two figures also got a similar percent that was one in twenty in 2003 On the other hand, again once a week had a highest figure compared with other days at 31 per cent, everyday and never were same deegre in 2003 and a few times a year and a week as wel were same that were on in twenty and about 15 per cent.
A glance at that bar chart provided reveals the number of UK citizens who ate junk food
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from 2003 to 2013.

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from the chart, eating
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were dominated
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in the whole graph and that the biggest percentage in 2006 than the other days, at more or less 35 per cent. Several
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a
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and twice a month were equal to 20 percent and quarter. There was a high difference between a few
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and
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is the fact that, in 2013 was eating more
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food
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that the highest figure out of 1
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.
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as popular as the former trend at 27 per cent. In
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a similar percent that was one in twenty in 2003

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in 2003 and a few
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IELTS academic A glance at that bar chart provided reveals the number of UK citizens who ate junk food regularly throughout year from 2003 to 2013.

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