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The diagram illustrates how to manage a hot air balloon to take off from land.

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The diagram illustrates the process of activating an airship. There are a total of 7 steps in the process, beginning with setting up the cover and ending when the balloon lands. At the first step of operating a balloon, the engineers set up the envelope in the ground then they use an inflator fan to blow the cover. The next step, the blown balloon is added to a basket including butane tanks. Next, they burn the mixture of air and butane to become a warm, light and dense air. Following the blowing of the envelope, the balloon flies into the sky with a couple of people in the basket. After reaching high enough, the engineers use the parachute valve to control the airship's ascent and descent. Finally, after the flight, they land on the ground and finish the process of running a balloon.
The diagram illustrates the process of activating an airship. There are a total of 7 steps in the process, beginning with setting up the cover and ending when the
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balloon
lands.

At the
first
step of operating a
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balloon
, the engineers set up the envelope in the ground then they
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use
an
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inflator
fan to blow the cover. The
next
step, the blown
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balloon
is
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added
to a basket including butane tanks.
Next
, they burn the mixture of air and butane to become a warm, light and dense air.

Following the blowing of the envelope, the
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balloon
flies into the sky with a couple of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in the basket. After reaching high
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enough
, the engineers
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use
the parachute valve to control the airship's ascent and descent.
Finally
, after the flight, they land on the ground and finish the process of running a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
balloon
.
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IELTS academic The diagram illustrates how to manage a hot air balloon to take off from land.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
143 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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