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The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. XLXY
The production of honey by bees is an interesting process. The paragraph below describes the process of how bees produce honey. Bees reside in a container like structure built by joining a large number of hexagonal cells called Hive. The bees leave Hive in search of flowers with nectars. Nectar is a sweet liquid produced by flowers and is the most important ingredient required by bees for producing honey. Once these flowers are found, bees then carry the sweet nectar liquid to their Hives. The liquid is deposited in cells of Hive. This process is repeated until all the cells in Hive are filled with Nectar. After storing nectar in cells, the bees then air the liquid using their wings. By constantly flapping their wings, the bees generate enough air for evaporation to happen. With Evaporation taking place, the water present in the nectar liquid which is deposited in the cells of Hives, is changed to gas leaving pure honey behind.
The production of honey by bees is an interesting process. The paragraph below
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describes
the process of how bees produce honey.

Bees reside in a container like structure built by joining
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a large number of
hexagonal
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cells
called Hive. The bees
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leave
Hive in search of flowers with
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nectars
.
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Nectar
is a sweet liquid produced by flowers and is the most
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important
ingredient required by bees for producing honey. Once these flowers
are found
, bees then carry the sweet
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nectar
liquid to their Hives. The liquid
is deposited
in
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cells
of Hive. This process
is repeated
until all the
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cells
in Hive
are filled
with
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Nectar
. After storing
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nectar
in
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cells
, the bees then air the liquid using their wings. By
constantly
flapping their wings, the bees generate
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enough
air for evaporation to happen. With Evaporation taking place, the water present in the
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nectar
liquid which
is deposited
in the
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cells
of Hives, is
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changed
to gas leaving pure honey behind.
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IELTS academic The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey.

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
161 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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