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The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. L2Y6
The first map represents a university campus in 2010 and the second map shows it in current time after it has been developed. Overall, throught the improving time, there are different in building numbers and individual and combining facilities. Although the number of structures is constant, the green land has been decreased over the periode. Initialy, the biggest change is raising in number of student accommodation buildings from two to three buildings which are larger than old ones. Furthermore, one of oldest student accommodation converted to new assosiation which include shops office and other facilities for student. Moreover, science and art colloge are saperated and all facilities such as shops, restaurants and university offices are combined in the new building which replace on of old student accomodation building.
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the improving time, there are
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numbers and individual and combining facilities. Although the number of structures is constant, the green land has
been decreased
over the
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periode
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, the biggest
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is raising in number of student accommodation
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buildings
from two to three
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buildings
which are larger than
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ones.
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student accommodation converted to new
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assosiation
which include shops office and other facilities for student.

Moreover
, science and art
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colloge
are
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saperated
and all facilities such as shops, restaurants and university offices
are combined
in the new
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building
which replace on of
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student
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IELTS academic The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
128 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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