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The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates seven most important stages on producing of honey by bees. The whole process begins with first stage where bees build a hive and finished when honey is ready to be collected and used for maybe, , consumption” by human. Like I said firstly bees must build a hive or also called containers, and it consist many of cells. Second stage in this process is when bees leave their hive and are prepared for searching some flowers. When they find the flower, which is suitable for them, they collect all nectar from the head of the flower. Nectar is type of liquid and is kind of sweet. Following these bees come back to their hives where the whole production begins. They put nectar into cells with their wings and it must be refreshed and little bit freezes. As consequence nectar loses a water content and then the honey is produced and prepared.

The diagram illustrates seven most This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
 stages on producing of honey by bees. The whole process This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiatescommences
begins
 with first
 stage where bees build a hive and finished when honey is ready to be collected
 and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 for maybe,Two consecutive commas,
 ,
 consumption” by human.

Like I said firstly
 bees This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
 build a hive or also
 called containers, and it After ‘it’, use the third-person verb form “consists”.consists
consist
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 of cells. Second stage in this process is when bees This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :depart
leave
 their hive and are prepared
 for searching This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 flowers. When they find the flower, which is suitable for them, they collect all You use this word too often, consider replacing it withhoney
nectar
 from the head of the flower. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withhoney
Nectar
 is type of liquid and is kind of sweet.

Following these bees This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approacharrive
come
 back to their hives where the whole production This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiatescommences
begins
. They put You use this word too often, consider replacing it withhoney
nectar
 into cells with their Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).wings, and
wings and
 it This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
be refreshed
 and Reduce redundancy by using “little” or “bit”.littlebit
little bit
 freezes.

As consequence You use this word too often, consider replacing it withhoney
nectar
 loses a water content and then the honey is produced
 and prepared. 