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The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows the different kind of stages during the making of honey by bees. Indeed, bees shelter is known as hive where bees lives with their siblings and manufacture honey. firstly, bees moves from one place to another place in the search of flower to feed themselves. nectar is the natural sweet which is produced by flower. usually, nector is the main food of bees. It brings nector to the hive and create cells. During the process air plays an crucial role in making honey by evaporating water from hive and finally honey is produced. Overall, the different stage of honey making is finished.
The diagram
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shows
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different
kind of stages during the making of honey by bees.

Indeed
, bees shelter
is known
as hive where bees
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lives
with their siblings and manufacture honey.
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firstly
, bees
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moves
from one place to another place in the search of flower to feed themselves.
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nectar
is the natural sweet which
is produced
by flower.
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usually
,
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nector
is the main food of bees. It brings
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nector
to the hive and create cells. During the process air plays
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an
crucial role in making honey by evaporating water from hive and
finally
honey
is produced
.

Overall
, the
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different
stage of honey making
is finished
.

IELTS academic The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
105 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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