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The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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An inception of the data in the diagram reveals the process through which the carbonated drinks are prepared. In general, there are five main stages, beginning with water cleaning and culminating with packaging and delivering the final product. In conclusion, during the sophisticated procedure, including the cleaning of water, heating evaporation and carbonation, mixing, and filtering, the carbonated drinks are completely produced and ready for the consumption. In the first two stages, the raw water is filtered and subsequently goes among water softener with chemicals. Continuing running through the pump, it is heated by the use of electric heaters. Following this, water appears to run along the cooling pipe, and then is processed by the carbon dioxide. Over the last three steps, the water is stored in mixing tank, where it is blended with three various additives, namely colouring, syrop, and flavour. Once the water has been filtered, it is then filled in two different options such as bottles and cans and packaged into boxes. Afterwards, it is totally prepared to be delivered and established into shelfs in supermarkets for people’s use.
An inception of the data in the diagram reveals the process through which the carbonated drinks
are prepared
.
In general
, there are five main stages, beginning with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
cleaning and culminating with packaging and delivering the final product.

In conclusion
, during the sophisticated procedure, including the cleaning of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
, heating evaporation and carbonation, mixing, and filtering, the carbonated drinks are completely produced and ready for the consumption.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
the
first
two stages, the raw
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
is filtered
and
subsequently
goes among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
softener with chemicals. Continuing running through the pump, it
is heated
by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of electric heaters. Following this,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
appears to run along the cooling pipe, and then
is processed
by the carbon dioxide.

Over the last three steps, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
is stored
in mixing tank, where it
is blended
with three various additives,
namely
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colouring
,
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syrop
, and
Possible spelling mistake. 'flavour' is British English.
flavour
. Once the
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water
has
been filtered
, it is then filled in two
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
options such as bottles and cans and packaged into boxes. Afterwards, it is
totally
prepared to
be delivered
and established into
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shelfs
in supermarkets for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
’s
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
.
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IELTS academic The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
182 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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