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The pie graphs given below show the result of a survey of childrens activities. The first graph shows cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.

The pie graphs given below show the result of a survey of childrens activities. The first graph shows cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. k1RR
The two circular graphs given under the task illustrate and compare the ratio of cultural and leisure activities in which boys and girls participated. In an overview, most of the boys participated in Computer Games while girls in Dancing. Both were equally interested in music. A quick glance at the charts reveal that boys preferred Soccer as compared to girls who preferred gymnastic. In reading, merely 2% of boys took part whereas girls were above two- fifth. The proportion of boys interested in Computer games was double the ratio of girls. Moving to further categories, it is observed that 11% of boys participated in Skateboarding. In comparison, 15% of girls took part in Netball since they had no interest in Skateboarding. Both the genders had equal curiosity for listening to music. Playing basketball was famous among boys and dancing among girls with 26% and 27% respectively.
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participated. In an overview, most of the
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boys
participated in Computer Games while
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girls
in Dancing. Both were
equally
interested in music. A quick glance at the charts reveal that
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boys
preferred Soccer as compared to
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girls
who preferred gymnastic. In reading,
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boys
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took part
whereas
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girls
were above two- fifth. The proportion of
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boys
interested in Computer games was double the ratio of
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girls
. Moving to
further
categories, it
is observed
that 11% of
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boys
participated in Skateboarding.
In comparison
, 15% of
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girls
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took part
in Netball since they had no interest in Skateboarding. Both the genders had equal curiosity for listening to music. Playing basketball was
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with 26% and 27%
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IELTS academic The pie graphs given below show the result of a survey of childrens activities. The first graph shows cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.

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