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The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. kKjW
This process shows how does the carbonated drinks are made. It is clear from the diagram that, there is five stages for the carbonated drinks to be done. According to what is shown the first stage start by cleaning the water then, in stage two heating evaporation and carbonation by the electric heaters and going on with stage three and four, while stage three is the mixing step where the colouring, syrup and flavour are mixing together, completing with step four filtering and filling in the bottles and cans in addition to the final step stage five in this level the cans and bottles are done and ready to go to the supermarket. To sum up, we could say that this progress have five stages, where the first stage is the stage that has more than three steps, while the last stage just has one step and that is the packaging
This process
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shows
how does the carbonated drinks
are made
. It is
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clear
from the diagram that, there is five
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stages
for the carbonated drinks to
be done
.

According to what
is shown
the
first
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stage
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start
by cleaning the water then, in
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stage
two heating evaporation and carbonation by the electric heaters and going on with
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stage
three and four, while
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stage
three is the mixing
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step
where the
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colouring
, syrup and
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flavour
are mixing together, completing with
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step
four
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filtering
and filling in the bottles and cans
in addition
to the final
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step
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stage
five in this level the cans and bottles
are done
and ready to go to the supermarket.

To sum up, we could say that
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this progress have
five
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stages
, where the
first
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stage
is the
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stage
that has more than three
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steps
, while the last
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stage
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just
has one
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step
and
that is
the packaging
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IELTS academic The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
150 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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