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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. RGaQ
The given diagram illustrates all the required stages for the operation of producing carbonated drinks. The process consists mainly of five different stages known as water cleaning, heating evaporation and carbonation, mixing, filtering and filling and finally packaging. In the factory responsible for carbonated drinks production, stage one also known as water cleaning starts where raw water gets filtered then enter a water softener machine and eventually have some chemicals added to it. Afterwards, stage two or heating, evaporation and carbonation step occur where the clean water enters a pump then get heated via electric heaters and subsequently cooled by adding carbon dioxide. Moreover the mixture is fed into a mixing tank to prepare it for phase 3. In this stage different kinds of colourings, syrups and flavours are combined with the water mixture. After that, stage 4 is initiated where the mixture from the mixing tank gets filtered and filled in various bottles and cans. At last, the process is concluded with stage 5 that concerns packaging the carbonated drinks and transfering them to the supermarkets.
The
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given
diagram illustrates all the required
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stages
for the operation of producing carbonated drinks.

The process consists
mainly
of five
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different
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stages
known as
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water
cleaning, heating evaporation and carbonation, mixing, filtering and filling and
finally
packaging.

In the factory responsible for carbonated drinks production,
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stage
one
also
known as
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water
cleaning
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starts
where raw
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water
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gets
filtered then enter a
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water
softener machine and
eventually
have
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some
chemicals
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added
to it. Afterwards,
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stage
two or heating, evaporation and carbonation step occur where the clean
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water
enters a pump then
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get
heated via electric heaters and
subsequently
cooled by adding carbon dioxide.
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Moreover
the mixture
is fed
into a mixing tank to prepare it for phase 3. In this
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stage
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different
kinds of
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colourings
, syrups and
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flavours
are combined
with the
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water
mixture.

After that,
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stage
4
is initiated
where the mixture from the mixing tank
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gets
filtered and filled in various bottles and cans. At last, the process
is concluded
with
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stage
5 that concerns packaging the carbonated drinks and
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transfering
them to the supermarkets.

IELTS academic The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
177 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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