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The diagram given us an overview of how a central heating system in a house works.

The diagram given us an overview of how a central heating system in a house works. This report explains the process of flow of the water from the storage tank to several different pipes and tanks and reaches to the taps finally. The process mainly consists of 10 elements to work correctly. Which mainly involved storage tanks and pipes as the main components. The cold water enters the house through a pipe which is connected to an oval shaped storage tank which has four pipes running from it. One of the pipes connected to boiler which works by gas or oil which helps to heat the boiler and warms the water. The hot water is pumped around the house through the radiators located in different rooms. Some of the hot water will be circulated through small tubes connected to the taps resulting hot water of the household purposes It appears to be the piping system includes and ability to pump back the water into the storage tank for future use.
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given
us an overview of how a central heating system in a
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house
works. This report
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explains
the process of flow of the
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water
from the
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storage
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tank
to several
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different
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pipes
and
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tanks
and reaches to the taps
finally
.

The process
mainly
consists of 10 elements to work
correctly
. Which
mainly
involved
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storage
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tanks
and
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pipes
as the main components.

The
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cold
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water
enters the
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house
through a
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pipe
which
is connected
to an oval shaped
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storage
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tank
which has four
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pipes
running from it. One of the
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pipes
connected to boiler which works by gas or oil which
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helps
to heat the boiler and warms the
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water
. The hot
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water
is pumped
around the
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house
through the radiators located in
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different
rooms.

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Some of the
hot
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water
will
be circulated
through
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small
tubes connected to the taps resulting hot
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water
of the household purposes It appears to be the piping system includes and ability to pump back the
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water
into the
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storage
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tank
for future
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use
.
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IELTS academic The diagram given us an overview of how a central heating system in a house works.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
170 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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